Monday, August 7, 2017

The Maori Cheif

LG: Use a variety of precise word and phrases to add info, enhance meaning and /or add mood to a character.
SOS: Use technical language and phrases.
         Use a variety of descriptive language techniques
         Use direct speech
         Use verbs and adverbs to describe how someone is doing something or saying something




The Maori Chief

As I walk past the rattling bushes leaves crushed under my feet, everything was peaceful until a mysterious man jumps out. Sweat starts to roll down my face as his brown beedy eyes stare into mine. My body starts trembling he stood there right in front of me as still as a statue. His dark hair glistened in the sunlight as his grey feathery cloak danced with the wind, his hand gripping onto his wooden taiaha.

9 comments:

  1. You hooked me in with a great first sentence
    You used great describing words
    Next time use more punctuation

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  2. great story very descriptive

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  3. your first sentence hooked me in.
    you put lots of descriptive language. next time add more punctuation.

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  4. Can i get a Hoya!
    I like the way you described the character.
    I like the way you hooked in the reader.
    Your next step is to use more punctuation.

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  5. hi i like the way you described the character and you used descriptive words your next step is use four types of punctuation

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  6. hi i like the way you described the character and you used descriptive words your next step is use four types of punctuation

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  7. very descriptive great story loved it

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  8. I like the way you described the character and your story was very descriptive your next step is more punctuation

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  9. Hey Angela

    I like the way you used descriptive language
    I like the way you showed not told
    Your next step is to use more punctuation

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